At 121 pages this is rather long, and would need to be in the area of 110 pages, max. They need to be much shorter, less blocky, and you need to say just enough to set the picture in the reader's head without over-describing. This is overwritten in a lot of spots, particularly the narratives. If we can ignore the formatting, which certainly has to be addressed, the story does flow quite well. And the supporting cast, again, as I said, you've woven a bit of crazy into each of them, ala Wes Anderson meets THE SANDLOT, but then I see a touch of Farrelly Brothers / KINGPIN in it as well. You've written a lot of great characters. My notes are going to be random so please forgive that. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author. How do I get my film's link and banner here?Īll screenplays on the and domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production Read Scripts Studios are posting for Award Consideration A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. Doubles :: SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board SimplyScripts Discussion Board Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
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